[Report This]Date: 07/31/2006 06:15 pm Title: One Shot
Good story! I like it a lot.
[Report This]Date: 04/12/2006 01:08 am Title: One Shot
WOW! I loved this - "For one second, Harry had no idea what they wanted from him, but something that might have been more than just force of habit prompted an idea into his head." I can just see him standing there, confused with no idea what they wanted from him, all of them looking at him expecantly like "Dude, lets go!" "for just one moment in time, he felt that all was right with the world." Something that the kid could really use a few more moments of, I'm sure.
[Report This]Date: 02/11/2006 10:21 pm Title: One Shot
This would have made an excellent beginning to book 6. I enjoyed reading it very much!
[Report This]Date: 07/05/2005 09:09 am Title: One Shot
Definetely good. And this is coming from a person who is having her work published, although I don't like to toot my own horn Had a lot of fun reading this. It was written - well, almost in the style of the Great J.K. Rowling herself. And for this, I applaud you. Interesting - Neville, a vulture Patronus? Fantastic. I'm bookmarking this.
[Report This]Date: 06/14/2005 04:58 am Title: One Shot
deadly. only 1 error!!
[Report This]Date: 06/05/2005 12:52 pm Title: One Shot
I liked this story so much that, several weeks later, I told my mother about it and printed it out for her. (Please note that I am 32, so it is not a case of running downstairs screeching "Mommy, Mommy, you HAVE to read this." She read the story and was MOST impressed with how you kept the characters just as JKR wrote them, how Hermione would do just that and Harry's little grin at the end is very Harry. She noted that the writing was very smooth, flowed well and the use of language fits very well with JKR's (she is also a fan) and that you must be very clever. The conversation then moved on to other things unrelated to anything that matters here. Four hours later, while quietly making dinner, my esteemed mother piped up with, "You know what that story needed?" To my chagrin, I had no idea what on earth she was talking about, so she clarified and then continued, "Neville's grandmother needed to smile at him. He's works so hard for her approval and she never gives it to him. She ought to give him a tiny smile. That would top it all off." I promised that I would relay the note - and thus I have. Once again, you have made another fan - this time from someone who has no clue what fanfiction is or why on earth people write it.
[Report This]Date: 05/25/2005 09:17 am Title: One Shot
That was an awesome story. Just like a scene from one of the books themsleves. Hermione's cleverness, roping Fudge in, and Percy being all stuffy and pompous. I particularly liked the interaction between Harry and Dudley, and Neville's patronus was perfect. Very, very well written :) (but I'd like to see what Harry and Dudley would do in an Australian summer -- Brits don't know what real heat is ;) )
[Report This]Date: 05/18/2005 01:40 pm Title: One Shot
The breezy opening paragraph drew me right in. Harry's paranoia--reaching levels Moody would approve--believable and humorous. This was my favorite line: With a curt nod, he Disapparated, leaving behind only the sharp crack of air rushing into the vacated space.--brilliant description! Neville's ugly vulture patronus resembling Snape -- how vivid and of course, causing, stunned Neville to almost drop his wand. Intelligent, entertaining, and beautifully written - I loved it!
[Report This]Date: 05/07/2005 02:58 pm Title: One Shot
Well, I messed up the long, detailed review that I meant to leave - thus, I'll just say Well done on your writing style - this could have been written by Rowling herself and wonderful on your characterizations - each is genuine and true to canon. The story could be directly from the next book and I wouldn't blink an eye.
[Report This]Date: 04/28/2005 08:51 pm Title: One Shot
very enjoyable- fits in very well in the harry potter world-
[Report This]Date: 04/06/2005 09:33 pm Title: One Shot
perfect -I can't find anything to criticise. Liked everything from "Weatherby" to Neville's Patronus (and especially Hermione), everyone is in character, original idea, keeping with JK's writing style -perfect job!
[Report This]Date: 04/05/2005 04:13 pm Title: One Shot
I like it. I like it a lot. I'd never thought about the possible ramifications of the DA nailing their OWLs, and this sets it up in a very believable way. I also like how you can make both Percy and Fudge antagonists without making them evil - I hope that JK will show similar restraint when I read Book 6!
[Report This]Date: 03/31/2005 06:51 pm Title: One Shot
i'm speechless. it's flawless and original. good job
[Report This]Date: 03/26/2005 09:57 pm Title: One Shot
Wow, Ramos, that was great! I rather liked Harry's healthy dose of paranoia when it came to Percy... will that boy ever get his head out of his arse? Hermione standing up and practically asserting herself as a lawyer for the Fifth Years was rather in character as well. And Neville got his Patronus! *grins* I especially enjoyed your choice for his animal! *laughs* Again, wonderful job! A most enjoyable read!
[Report This]Date: 03/25/2005 10:27 am Title: One Shot
this was a really good story maybe put it in a different section then humor though
[Report This]Date: 03/24/2005 02:57 pm Title: One Shot
Excellent short story! Believable situation and sharp dialogue. Very enjoyable! Let's hope JKR creates as good a vision of Harry's summer.
[Report This]Date: 03/23/2005 03:42 am Title: One Shot
Excellent story!!! I loved Hermione's quick thinking and Neville's Patronus is a hoot! Excellently written and a really great take on the Ministry's reaction to the OWL scores of the DA students. ANd Harry's test for Percy was genius. :)
[Report This]Date: 03/22/2005 04:20 pm Title: One Shot
I really enjoyed that especially the interaction between harry and Percy. I haven't read anything apart from HS/SS for ages but glad I did now. Good job.