[Report This]Date: 03/04/2008 04:59 am Title: For Whom the Bell Tolls
sorry, but no. that is just rank.
[Report This]Date: 10/02/2005 07:37 am Title: For Whom the Bell Tolls
Oh, that was HOT. hothothot. Whew.
[Report This]Date: 09/27/2005 07:15 pm Title: For Whom the Bell Tolls
Damn, that was hot. And wonderfully done!!!
[Report This]Date: 09/02/2005 05:43 pm Title: For Whom the Bell Tolls
Holy almost-incestuous hell, this was hot, woman - DAMN! I don’t care if they’re cousins any more than they did. The Pure-blooded Wizard community strikes me as populated by the kind of folks who would be entirely okay with the idea of cousins marrying, let alone shagging each other’s brains out against stone walls. Your description of Bella makes her sound like the most impossible seductress imaginable, able to seduce a man with one look. I loved this, because this is exactly how I see her. One bit of what I hope is concrit, though - remember how potent language is. Descriptors are like perfume - a little is delicious, a good amount is intoxicating for a short time, and a whole lot is overpowering and a distraction. Sometimes the hyperboles, adjectives, similes, and metaphors, etc. were coming on a trifle too thick and fast - you were going for an obsessive, overwrought, hothouse atmosphere, and that comes across VERY well, so well that I think you could have gone for a tad more action and a little less description and only made that carefully crafted momentum all the more painfully intense. Overall though, this is beautiful, wildly erotic little vignette, and I especially loved all the tortured-Gothic-angst of it. I’ll look forward to reading more of your writing. For all seasons, Guernica
[Report This]Date: 08/23/2005 10:39 pm Title: For Whom the Bell Tolls
Ah, so beautiful. I thank my dear friend smoke for pointing me here; in my adherence to slash, I had missed this gem of yours. A "PWP" label does not do this story justice. It's so poetic and lyrical and full of these great, descriptive words that evoke complete sensation in so few syllables. The taboo nature of the act comes across so perfectly, as does Sirius's guilt, helplessness, and surrender. So many evocative lines, I can't even count...
...beautiful like graveyards and crumbling churches and the quiet stillness caused by the Killing Curse.
Or - her mouth soft and full and sweet like rotten fruit...
Just so beautiful. And I adore your descriptions of Bellatrix: small, cold, thin, skeletal, beautiful like fine china, pale, false. Incredible story, dear writer. Thank you for it. :)
[Report This]Date: 08/23/2005 07:16 pm Title: For Whom the Bell Tolls
This is very hot and I love how conflicted Sirius is, but he goes ahead and does it anyway. Just like a man...
[Report This]Date: 08/19/2005 06:48 pm Title: For Whom the Bell Tolls
Hot! You paint very vivid pictures.
[Report This]Date: 08/08/2005 02:28 pm Title: For Whom the Bell Tolls
Very cool! Well done!
[Report This]Date: 08/05/2005 01:13 pm Title: For Whom the Bell Tolls
godd story but erm it was his cousion maybe a little bis sick
[Report This]Date: 08/05/2005 01:10 pm Title: For Whom the Bell Tolls
godd story but erm it was his cousion maybe a little bis sick