Reviewer: OriginalityPreferred Signed [Report This]
Date: 11/11/2005 04:32 pm Title: The First Task

An interesting idea, but it seems a bit dead to me. There's spots of good stuff - Viktor's dislike of Karkaroff, and such, but they're few and far between. I'm being told what's happening, not being in there and feeling it. Especially when Viktor's fighting the dragon - more detailed description would be nice, as would knowing what's going on in his head.

Author's Response: Thanks for reading! I agree that there ought to have been more showing and less telling, but this was written for a challenge and the word limit was 1000, hence the lack of detail. I ought to edit in a mention to that effect. :)