[Report This]Date: 12/27/2005 04:14 pm Title: Chapter Two
Oooo... so Hermione now has a new identity! Cool! Great chapter, warewolfe! :D
[Report This]Date: 12/18/2005 09:14 pm Title: Chapter One
I thought it was weird at first that she didn't know what was going on, but I'm guessing she knew it was a possibility, didn't know exactly when or if it would happen, and was so into the battle and etc that it disoriented her, right? You still have a few random details that I like. You could do even more if you wanted. JKR does that a LOT.
Author's Response: Correct. Someone else asked me about that, that they usually read fics where Hermione knows where she is... I'm definitely not striving to write a fic thats already been written, though, am I?
Thanks!
-W
[Report This]Date: 12/18/2005 09:12 pm Title: Prologue
I like your tone and style. I hope it continues even though Malfoy's not going to be narrating the rest. Neat little details tucked in here and there. I don't think Snape is actually on the Dark Lord's side, but thats really not important to your story... just my intense fandom, really. Please, make Tom Riddle seem like he's heading in the direction we know he is. Don't make him a softee, misunderstood tragic, or anything like that. Don't hurry in this PLEASE.
Author's Response: I agree about Snape. It was just too complicated to explain exactly what I think happened in a little prologue in which it really doesn't matter much, or contribute to the plot in any way...
Don't worry about Tom. I don't plan on it. NOR do I plan on making Hermione fall in love with a scary murdering devil. That's not in character for her either. The thing here is intellect.
Thanks a bunch,
-W
[Report This]Date: 12/17/2005 11:44 pm Title: Chapter One
Dumbledore! *cheers* He's here and Hermione's in contact with him! Yes! This is good! And Hermione's obviously relieved to see him. :D I know I would be. It sounds like, even at this time, Dumbledore is capable of making everyone feel safe and not have a care in the world! *hugs Dumbledore* Why, oh why did you have to die? *sob*
Excellent job, warewolfe! This story has really caught my attention! Can't wait to see what happens next! How will Hermione explain this? :)
Author's Response: I know, I miss Dumbledore so much. His death was such a shock, even though I had already guessed he would die... I just didn't expect it in such a manner. GAH.
Hermione will work on explaining this in chapters to come... keep reading!
Thanks for the review!
-W
[Report This]Date: 12/17/2005 12:31 pm Title: Prologue
Ooo... fascinating premise, warewolfe! You did an excellent job portraying the chaos of the battle. Draco's confrontation with Lucius was also awesome. :)
Can't wait to see what Hermione's going to do in the past. Will she recruit Dumbledore and a few others, perhaps the younger versions of the older members of the Order and their allies? McGonagall should be around at that point, as well as a few others. Moody, for example (though, he might be a little less paranoid than we know him to be. Good or bad? ;) ).
Again, outstanding job! Can't wait for more! :)
Author's Response: Draco is so much fun to write. He's so wry.
Keep reading! ;) Thanks for the review!
-W