Date: 04/26/2015 02:48 pm Title: A Successful Campaign or None of Us is Unscathed
Wonderful story. I love how well planned it all was (or at least appeared to be). Great last lines too.
Date: 04/26/2015 10:34 am Title: War is Upon Us, or Stand and Be Counted (II)
I love that you pointed out why Harry was still talking to Voldemort. The mechanism for killing him was brilliant. Glad they patched things up with McGonagall.
Date: 04/26/2015 10:12 am Title: War is Upon Us, or Stand and Be Counted (Part One)
Amazing battle scene - so vivid. I like how you include the smell of things, all sorts of little details about what they can see and can't see. Voldemort's efforts to undermine them were frightening because they could work. Their teamwork is beautiful.
Date: 04/26/2015 12:10 am Title: The Front is Engaged; of Must We Kill? (Part Two)
This is moving quickly. Loved Harry's description of how you fight a battle and then you wake up and it is days later. Cute bit re Snape at the end.
Date: 04/25/2015 11:53 pm Title: The Front is Engaged; or Must We Kill?
What a horrible trial. Did love the bit with Dumbledore. Seeing all of his worst fears was awful though.
Date: 04/25/2015 11:30 pm Title: Raising the Standard, or War Comes with the Dawn (Part Two)
Wonderful kiss, well, kisses. Loved the awkward moment afterward and how they resolved to explore later. The vows and the descriptions of the bonds between them were wonderful.
Date: 04/25/2015 11:02 pm Title: Raising the Standard, or War Comes with the Dawn (Part One)
I like the twist on Harry being a horcrux. The bit about Snape being able to get them to Voldemort is fantastic. Love the little interactions between Draco and Hermione.
Date: 04/25/2015 10:40 pm Title: Quickening the Blade; or Nerves on the Eve of Battle (Part Two)
Sorry but I just can't picture McGonagall being so obnoxious. I know she was attached to Dumbledore and angry with Snape, but I can't imagine her being so harsh with Harry, Ron & Hermione. I was a bit surprised by their tone with her too.
The bit with the cup hidden behind/in? the house elf head was brilliant and completely gross.
Date: 04/25/2015 03:08 pm Title: Quickening the Blade; or Nerves on the Eve of Battle (Part One)
I almost wish she'd been the R.A.B. in the books. She was horrible, but amazing. Her story was inventive too. I hated the bit about Bellatrix kidnapping Regulus. I like that you had her remain a bigoted bitch. That made sense.
Date: 04/25/2015 02:20 pm Title: Many Blades, Single Purpose, or United Allies, Unifying Strategies (Part Two)
I do hope Snape keeps his snarky edge, even though it is nice that they can at least work together. Love the description of the map Hermione and Draco were working on.
Date: 04/25/2015 09:08 am Title: Many Blades, Single Purpose, or United Allies, Unifying Strategies (Part One)
Enjoyed the shifting moods in the kitchen. Dobby's reactions were fun, as were some of the magical details like the waddling tea pot. The description of Ron was great, esp. as he made sure Snape got a decent breakfast.
Date: 04/25/2015 12:29 am Title: Tempering the Blade, or We are Become Warriors
Sad that Percy is still a jerk. The back story on Lucius was horrible. I like how Snape is uncomfortable being nice to Draco.
Date: 04/24/2015 11:47 pm Title: Crucible of Terrible Purpose, or We are None Very Different (Part Two)
Why didn't the clock show the change in Charlie's state? Just curious. That was all horrible. I do love the detail about their escape route. Fascinating choice to kill off all of the known Death Eaters.
Date: 04/24/2015 11:09 pm Title: Crucible of Terrible Purpose, or We Are None Very Different (Part One)
Wow - I love these two together. Snape's reaction to Draco's insult was unexpected, apparently to him too. That was so incredible. The description of the refugees was so harsh. I loved the memories of his mother and the reading.
Date: 04/24/2015 10:19 pm Title: Shaping the Steel, or Forgiving Daughter (Part Two)
I'm so happy that you're making Ron be a reasonable and decent human, even though he and Hermione are not romantically right for each other. Love your descriptions of the different sort of magic they're using. The Dursleys were horrible, but convincing. The letter was amazing - tore my heart out.
Date: 04/24/2015 09:54 pm Title: Shaping the Steel, or Forgiving Daughter (Part One)
I love Hermione's self-reflection. Can't wait to see what all she and the boys learn.
Date: 04/24/2015 09:54 pm Title: Shaping the Steel, or Forgiving Daughter (Part One)
I love Hermione's self-reflection. Can't wait to see what all she and the boys learn.
Date: 04/24/2015 03:04 pm Title: The Forging of a Blade or Prodigal Sons
I'm so happy to have found this. Thoroughly enjoyed the first chapter. Loved the goblin banker named "Tightfist," loved the detail about their travels in Euorpe. The encounter with the vampires was horribly vivid. I'd never thought about Snape's discomfort with Harry being there to witness his killing of Dumbledore (interesting that he knew). The snarky but genuine friendship between Draco and Snape was so enjoyable. Love how Hermione just showed up in the scent on the comforter and, maybe, as the figure in the garden.
Date: 05/25/2011 10:49 pm Title: The Forging of a Blade or Prodigal Sons
I think I enjoyed your story about Lucius and Hermione a little more but I liked this too. :) I got a real sense of Draco's and Severus' desperation, going from place to place, trying to avoid death. I liked how you told about their travels through Draco's memories at the window. Great chapter. See you next time.
Date: 06/25/2009 10:02 pm Title: A Successful Campaign or None of Us is Unscathed
this was an adorable story! i loved it:))
[Report This]Date: 06/08/2008 07:31 pm Title: A Successful Campaign or None of Us is Unscathed
what a fantastic story! Love it, love it, love it!!!
[Report This]Date: 05/04/2008 02:36 am Title: A Successful Campaign or None of Us is Unscathed
Great story. Very well written with engaging characterizations. I loved the connection you created between the five. It was a great plot device to speed up the trust between the characters. I'll definitely have to read more of your works.
[Report This]Date: 03/23/2008 03:48 pm Title: A Successful Campaign or None of Us is Unscathed
This is the second or third time I've read the story. I figured I would review this time around. Heh... Brilliant and original. The way Draco and Severus join the forces has been done numerous times, but never like this. I quite enjoyed the way you maneuvered your characters and created their own personalities. Very well done.
[Report This]Date: 11/26/2007 04:09 pm Title: Raising the Standard, or War Comes with the Dawn (Part One)
Oh my! I found an unintentional spelling mistake...
“That explains Tom Riddle’s dairy then,”
I just had to point out. Though great story so far!
Author's Response: ACK! Thank you very much for pointing it out. I hate typos. I'm glad you're enjoying it otherwise.
[Report This]Date: 11/08/2007 03:26 pm Title: A Successful Campaign or None of Us is Unscathed
I read this a long time ago and just came back to it - it was just as good the second time around. And for some reason all I can keep thinking of is how pleased I was that you named the chapters and I especially loved the dual names. Not to mention that what was contained therein was great.
Author's Response: How wonderful to think that you enjoyed the story enough to re-read it, and that it didn't disappoint you. Thank you very much. I had a wonderful time with the chapter names in this.