[Report This]Date: 09/21/2007 02:18 pm Title: Omega
Ohh!
Wow, *fans herself* Are you planning a sequel? I loved this fic, was very well written!
Congrats!
Author's Response: Thanks! No plans for anything. It was a completely spontaneous collaboration. Lee wrote me the first chapter, and I was so inspired I had to continue. It just sort of happened. :-) ~smoke
[Report This]Date: 08/09/2007 11:55 am Title: Omega
that was so great! at first in the beginning i was a little confused as to remus's reasons for...all of that. haha butttt... i love how he was trying to protect bill and the people that bill loves! aw that was greatttt!
Author's Response: Oh, yes, Lupin's motives were entirely selfless. :-) Thanks for commenting. ~smoke
[Report This]Date: 09/12/2006 08:30 am Title: Omega
I gotta say that this story was beautiful and I loved it! I loved the psychology in it, the relationship between Alpha and Beta.
You've given me some wonderful things to think about. Thank you so very much!!!!!
Author's Response: You are entirely welcome! We enjoyed writing it.
[Report This]Date: 06/11/2006 08:38 pm Title: Omega
Well, this was an excellent story, well written and very dark. Love that aspect of it, the dark part, the wolf, the power. The characters were very believable - Remus was still Remus which is something I really appreciate when reading fan fic. Yes, you have brought out his dark side as the main focus really in the story, but you still show his soft demeanor, that kind, wizard that JKR wrote. And the sex scenes, whew! They were very hot and inspiring! Great job!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! It started as a rather frivolous one-shot PWP, but we did try to make it a bit more than that as things went on. We're so glad you enjoyed it. :) ~Lee
[Report This]Date: 06/05/2006 08:29 pm Title: Alpha
Complete story review:
Daringly and skillfully written. Excellent editing. Dry humour. You even managed to make it fit in with canon, which is rarely done well. A really good all-around fic.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! We're both delighted you enjoyed it. :) ~Lee
[Report This]Date: 05/30/2006 09:50 am Title: Omega
Very nice. I enjoyed it so much. Thank you for making a fantabulous story and for sharing it with us. :D
Author's Response: Glad you enjoyed it, and thanks for reviewing! -smoke
[Report This]Date: 02/23/2006 06:20 am Title: Omega
Okay, I’ve read and re-read the last two chapters because it was really starting to bug me about the sex with Remus and still having sex with Fleur. I think I have it right. - Remus was trying to teach Bill that every full moon he would get wild and aggressive and the only way to release it was thru violent animal sex with Remus because he would be the only one who would be able to take it. And when Bill is in his wolf time, if he has the urge to fuck, he uses Remus. And when he’s *not* in his wolf time, and he’s back to his human time, he’ll go back to his desires of wanting to fuck Fleur. – Just Fleur, right? The reason I’m asking is because I could tell that Remus and Bill now have a little shared secret of being fuck buddies and will give each other little sexual knowing winks to each other, kind of like, “oh you just wait till the full moon. I’m going to fuck you raw.”
If that’s the case, then it’s sad - Love and compassion with a female who keeps *their sanity* and lustful, wild animal sex with each other. I mean the sexual tension between the two men would disrupt their ‘normal’ life, so how can they be free to live their own life with all that UST? And unless they’re damn good liars – which rule #1 says no lying – wouldn’t Fleur and Tonks see that? Feel that?
But, I still am confused about that last line. What kind of aspects of being a werewolf isn’t so bad after all if it’s referring to be around Fleur and having his cock twitch around her? He’s in his human form so the aspects of being a werewolf wouldn’t matter. If anything, being a *human* is a good aspect because then he still has desires for a woman and not a Dom male… Right?
Sorry. I have a tendency to over-analyse things. I know it just FanFiction, but it was just bugging me. If I didn’t enjoy the fic so much I wouldn’t have said anything to begin with. I never comment if I don’t like a fic or if it disgusts me… which it doesn’t. ; D
Annie
Author's Response: LOL! You're reading and rereading? So *that's* why our page views keep going up! ;-) I'm glad the story has been so engaging for you, even if it seems confusing. It's not meant to be overly confusing, but it *is* meant to be complicated. Just like real life romance and sex, really - it's never as easy as we want it to be. They are both in a very interesting position now, aren't they? No, it's not quite fair to Tonks and Fleur to have this werewolf sex pact once a month, but, as Remus says, he's not sure what else to do about it. They are Dark Creatures; human rules can't always apply. (And canon-wise, Remus *tried* to keep Tonks away, but she begged to be part of his life - whatever sort of life that was. *shakes head sadly*) ;-) I think you've basically got it now, although they won't be sharing any knowing winks, because as Remus pointed out, Bill won't *want* to share any knowing winks during the moon's downtime. He will forget all about it, and be able to live as he wishes, as a human, with his wife. As for the last line, I'll let smoke have a go at it, since she wrote it. :) ~Lee
Author's Response: *slides in* Sorry I'm late. As Lee said, the wolf sex isn't really about sex, or gender, or pleasure, but about channeling the wolf aggression in a way that will keep the "non-wolf" segment of the population safe. As Remus said, some werewolves can't use sex and end up fighting. These are the ones who most likely (I imagine) end up living in the wild all the time. While they (Remus and Bill) may enjoy the sex during the moon time, it's not something to look forward to as it is a manifestation of their condition, and an reminder of the fact that there are aspects of their lives that they can't control. Remus enjoys it because he's comfortable with who he is, but he'd give it up in a heartbeat if it meant he wasn't a werewolf anymore. It is simply what it is for him.
The last line. *sigh* I wasn't all that happy with it, and now it's come home to roost. What it meant, quite simply, was that with the werewolf stamina, he could arouse again quickly, where - as a man - he'd probably have been fucked out for days. ;) -smoke
[Report This]Date: 02/22/2006 02:02 pm Title: Omega
I found your fic thru a friend's recommendation and I must say I did enjoy it. A little disappointed tho that Bill gave in to the fact that he was only to be a fuck toy for Remus - whether he enjoyed it sexually or not. I honestly thought it was going to end with a "I love you Fleur but I just don't have the urge to fuck you any more... But I still love you."
I do have a question tho. The last line: "Maybe there were some aspects of being a werewolf that weren't so bad after all." I know that line was referring to the fact that he felt his cock twitch around Fleur, but with his werewolf part, he only sleeps with men, right? *scratches head* I mean that's what the whole point of the story was, right? That as a werewolf, he *only* wants a dom male?
I don't mean this to sound like a flame or a criticism, just confused.
Annie
Author's Response: Hmm, well, Bill is not meant to be just a fuck toy for Remus. The relationship they eventually establish is mutually beneficial - as Alpha and Beta, so to speak. We have heard from slash fans who wanted the boys to run off together, from het fans who are appalled that the boys are cheating on their women, and from those in between, who want the four of them to just get naked. ;-) It's hard to please everybody. We hoped it was clear why Bill needs both relationships - with Fleur and with Remus, but if it's not clear to you, then that's a valid critique that you as a reader can make. We did our best. "With his werewolf part, he only sleeps with men, right?" No. He only sleeps with *Remus*, his alpha. Gender is quite irrelevant. :) The whole point of the story was really just Bill, and Remus, coming to terms with what might happen outside the forest environment if two werewolves live in close proximity, and how best they can balance werewolf desires with human lives. Hope that helps a bit! We're glad this has been so thought-provoking for you! ~Lee
[Report This]Date: 02/21/2006 01:41 am Title: Omega
All's well that ends smutty!!! LOL. I think Bill's going to need a wheelchair with a big cushion for the next week, though. ;D Bill did deserve that slap. Tonks is a saint.
Thanks for the story!
Author's Response: You're welcome! That's all true - and next month, they get to do it again, lol! -smoke
Author's Response: Glad you enjoyed it! ~Lee
[Report This]Date: 02/18/2006 08:32 am Title: Omega
Hello again! :o) Sorry to leave a second review, but I think you misinterpreted my first one. I used the term "erotica" to label both hard and soft PWP (I was not surprised to find hard sex in your chapters, lol, I expected it!). I did not mean to say that the sex scenes were *distasteful*, for I have read much worse, frankly, and I don't think your fic falls in that category. You guys did too much characterization thinking for it to be a fic like that. What bothers me, in clearer terms, is that they could both get an erection all the way through an ejaculation three times in a row on the morning/day right after a full moon (with, even, the suggestion that Bill could still swoop down on Fleur for some make up sex at the end of the day!). No matter now the "alpha effect" could be blamed for this, I remain much unconvinced and that's why it came as a turn-off. One long sex scene would have been far enough in terms of keeping things *convincing* (given the time frame). One of your comments made me smile, though: why did you carry on with this story if you doubted it would meet anyone's tastes? Anyway, I hope this review clarifies things. Take care!
Author's Response: Well, yes, it was a bit much - for men. That was part of the point, that the werewolf side has different demands and capabilities. It did take Remus a bit longer to rouse and recover, being older, but we were trying to make the point that it is different for wolves. I'm sorry is wasn't to your tastes, but appreciate your taking the time to give such a thoughtful review. -smoke
Author's Response: The sex-writing in this story is of a very specific, and deliberate, kind. There are many ways to write sex (or erotica), and the way we chose to do it here is indeed very graphic, rough, and repetitive. If it turned you off, and was unconvincing to you, that is perfectly valid for you. Why did we carry on with the story if we doubted it would meet anyone's tastes? Because it met our own, and each other's! The original one-shot I wrote that is now chapter 1 of this story, was written for smoke, as a gift. I thought she would like it. She did, so we kept writing chapters for each other. Sure, we posted them publicly hoping that others would enjoy it as well, but I never expected the story to garner the response that it has. :) Thanks for your thoughts. ~Lee
[Report This]Date: 02/17/2006 07:40 pm Title: Omega
I enjoyed that story very much, guys; well done! I really liked Bill's growth through all this: its pace was seamless. You've really nailed it! (pun not intended). It was so believable that one could almost take this as canon information (the werewolf psychological evolution)!
One thing I liked a little less was the amount of sex in this chapter. I was reading about writing erotica this morning and the author made a comment about respecting physical parameters for the sex parts to be enjoyable and believable. I totally agree with her. I do love the whole interpersonal flavours you put here and there in all sexual encounters; it's amazing, it does bring a lot to the characterization and it is, of course, very erotic.
However, the number of times they went through full sexual intercourse, given the night they both have been through (especially in Remus' case), was a turn-off for me. I know one could explain it all by their werewolf side having its own physical impacts, but it does not do it for me, and I found the repeated sex scenes a little lengthy after a while. One last thing that I noticed is that Fleur has totally lost her French accent....
Nevertheless, this novel is absolutely a must-read and a reference. Wonderful job, and I hope to read more of your collaborations eventually! Take care! :o)
Author's Response: Well, we can't please everyone. Some readers have found the sex too much and too icky; others have begged for more. We've kept the PWP label through 8 chapters in the hope that those who are looking for subtle erotica wouldn't bother with us. I do understand what you mean about the difference between literary erotica and cock-smashing porn (and there *is* a big difference), but we only ever intended this to be the latter. This is unabashedly a very hardcore story, and not to everyone's tastes. We're surprised it's to *anyone's* tastes, frankly. Thanks for reading, though. I'm glad you enjoyed some parts of it. ~Lee
Author's Response: As for Fleur's accent. Sorry, but I hate "reading" accents, and would never presume I could begin to write one. Maybe it's just me, but they set my teeth on edge. -smoke
[Report This]Date: 02/17/2006 01:11 pm Title: Omega
Oh. Well all right, it can end there. But... but... I don't want it to end! What about next month? *grins* I REALLY enjoyed that fic. The two of you did an absolutely amazing job writing it, making it believable, giving it enough plot and characterisation to make me care about the characters... I could go on and on... and I do whenever I'm recommending this story to someone. Anyway, thanks for sharing your devious brilliance, I've loved every word of it!
Author's Response: Next month? Read the story over again, and pretend it's the next month. That's about what's going to happen, all over again. :) Glad you've enjoyed the tale so much! ~Lee
Author's Response: Yes, next month should be pretty much a repeat - although one can hope that Bill learned something. ;-) Glad you enjoyed it, and thanks for reviewing. -smoke
[Report This]Date: 02/02/2006 09:35 am Title: Eta
6200 words? It didn't feel like it. Honest, I get so involved in the story (you may have been going for PWP but you've written much more) that when I get to the end, I'm dying for more! You have a group of fangurls, btw ;) We sit in AIM chat and discuss the story, and inform each other when there's a new chapter up and a couple of us race to review ;) There's at least six of us. *looks at earlier review, giggles at author reply* Naw, this really isn't PWP, but I also don't have trouble buying the scenario that you've set up, either. I'm sad that you've only got one chapter to go... but I can't wait for it!
Author's Response: Thank you. We're glad you're enjoying it! ~Lee
[Report This]Date: 02/01/2006 03:54 pm Title: Eta
"You worth all this trouble, by the way?" I love this line. I may have to use it later...
Another wonderful chapter. I was surprised to see you take us into Remus' back-story. I rather expected to jump into taking care of Fleur. But this worked very effectively. The full moon next? I'm looking forward to it!
Author's Response: Ha, glad you liked that line. I'm trying not to beat on poor Tonks here, and actually, writing this is making me like her as a character a bit more, which is nice. As for Fleur, never fear, she'll make another appearance. But for this chapter, it was a bit too soon for her - she's still off steaming somewhere. :) Thanks for the review! ~Lee
[Report This]Date: 02/01/2006 02:11 pm Title: Eta
Ack! Okay, not fair! That ended WAY too soon! But, I loved the glimpse into Remus' history. The added depth to his characterisation just makes the whole story that much better... and it was great to begin with! So, has Bill really submitted? What about Fleur and Tonks, will we get to see that conversation? *chews nails* This is my guilty pleasure ;) I check this fic daily for updates! *dons fangurl t-shirt* Thanks for another great chapter!
Author's Response: Ends too soon? It's 6,200 words! I've already been fiddling with it for a month; if I waited to make it any longer, I think I would have been lynched by readers. :) I'm glad you've enjoyed Remus's side of the story. We were hinting at that in earlier chapters, but I wanted to make it more explicit now that he's not just making this shit up - it happened to him, and he's better for it, in a way... so he's going to make sure it happens to Bill as well - and that *he'll* be better for it, too. :) We're not quite done with Fleur and Tonks yet, don't worry. Final chapter should be along shortly. ~Lee
[Report This]Date: 01/15/2006 01:13 pm Title: Zeta
NONONONO! DON'T STOP THERE!
Author's Response: Deep breaths - lol! We're not done. There were delays, first due to my computer meltdown, then Lee's vacation, but we're not done yet, I promise! -smoke
[Report This]Date: 01/15/2006 03:00 am Title: Alpha
haha- a week at most
Author's Response: A week? Did I say a week? Did you say a week, Lee? It is coming - should be in the que in a day or two. -smoke
[Report This]Date: 01/15/2006 02:54 am Title: Alpha
haha- a week at most
Author's Response: And *that* was supposed to end the story, since it began life as that one-shot. Smoke convinced me there was much more to the tale, though, so it has become and 8-chaptered fic now... ~Lee
[Report This]Date: 12/23/2005 05:25 am Title: Alpha
Um.... interesting. But when Arthur Weasley is attacked by the snake and is taken to St Mungo's, Lupin visits him, and there is a full warewolf in the bed opposite Arthur, and he doesn't feel threatened. Did you mean for it to be totally connected to the storyline of the Harry Potter books?
Author's Response: No. It's a PWP, nothing more, in which Remus and Bill get to fuck a lot. That's all we were after. :) ~Lee
Author's Response: Sorry, jet lag. :) Let me add that yes, of course we are trying to be as faithful to canon as possible within the realm of PWP, which is why we haven't handily done away with Tonks and Fleur. The werewolf in the hospital did not pose a threat to Remus in the same way *Bill* did not pose a threat, when in the hospital in HBP. We begin our tale after Bill's release, and the first chapter alludes to some aggressive behaviour on Bill's part towards Remus. That is what Remus is reacting to. If you keep reading, more of this werewolf psychology, as we see it, will be explained, but if you didn't like this first chapter, you really won't like the rest. :) ~Lee
[Report This]Date: 12/21/2005 03:44 pm Title: Zeta
THAT'S A HORRIBLE PLACE TO STOP! Oops, sorry, it's actually brilliant as a cliff-hanger, I just want more... I didn't expect to be compelled by this story- but you've done just that. You have at least one rabid fan.
Author's Response: So many people have yelled at us for that, but I didn't think it was a cliff-hanger. After all, we know what he's done. ;) Thanks for reviewing!
[Report This]Date: 12/21/2005 02:30 am Title: Zeta
Hmm... I figured he would lose Fleur at some point. I guess this might be the point. Kind of looks like whatever Bill wishes he was, it's not to be. I really feel for him, it must be frightening to be so out of control. If he were to mortally harm or maim a member of his family, I can see him never forgiving himself. I'm just wondering why no one has considered isolating Bill from being among large numbers of people during his first full moon until he can find a way to cope? Might be safer for all concerned. So sad for him.
Author's Response: Has he lost Fleur? We shall have to wait and see. ;) They are going to isolate him somewhat - he's going to have the twins on hand to make sure he doesn't hurt anyone, including himself. Thanks for reviewing.
[Report This]Date: 12/20/2005 12:57 pm Title: Zeta
Hello again! Happy to see an excellent addition! I think this whole piece really illustrates, in a way, what Remus has been through when it happened to him (though he was much younger and the issues were different). The loss of a part of his identity must have been awful, added to all the challenges of growing up, mastering one's changing mood, one's aggressivity, etc. Your plot really describes it well at many levels and it really makes it precious and unique. I see that the italics are less "overused", but still very present, nevertheless. I also appreciate the "flashbacks" a lot, but since it has been used in each and every post, it might begin to feel a bit redundant. Maybe the rhythm could develop into something else eventually?
Author's Response: The italics are mostly used to denote remembered dialog, rather than current dialog. *shrugs* As for the flashbacks, Bill's mind can't help going over and over what has happened - something with which I can certainly identify. Thanks for the thoughtful review.
[Report This]Date: 11/26/2005 10:42 pm Title: Epsilon
Well, now that Bill has seemed to accept Remus' terms, will he be able to continue with Fleur? I wonder if he would be able to. Remus seems to see it as an outlet that lets him be with Tonks, but I wonder if he really will want to stick with her in the end.
Author's Response: Ooh, has Bill really accepted this? Hmmm... ;-) As for Fleur and Tonks, stay tuned! ~Lee
[Report This]Date: 11/26/2005 02:29 pm Title: Epsilon
OMG... *wipes drool off of chin, and Tshirt and laptop...*
I'm not normally into slash, but this is just way too well written and HOT for me to leave it alone... Wow. Good job with this!
Author's Response: Thank you! ~Lee
[Report This]Date: 11/26/2005 11:55 am Title: Epsilon
Hello guys! A longer chapter this time, yay! I continue to enjoy this story very much! I think the addition of Remus flirting with Fleur was very original, well-thought and absolutely appropriate, given the context. Again, you sticking to the werewolf side of Remus you created is still dead on, and never simple/blunt (in a literary point of view); well developped! The only thing I would comment on is the use of italics. I know your intent is to put an emphasis on some feelings, images, and so on, but I found it to be a bit too frequent at times, though at other times, it added a lot to the flow. Happy writing, and I look forward to your next installment!
Author's Response: Thank you! Glad you are enjoying. Re: italics - point taken. Sometimes it's inner monologue as well, although I'm the first to admit I get carried away with emphasis!italics. Must be because I tend to speak rather dramatically myself, so it ends up in my fic dialogue as well. :) ~Lee