[Report This]Date: 01/29/2006 02:05 am Title: Old Friends and New Ones
This seemed more like a filler chapter than anything else, besides the words at the beginning. There was one spot, "“So what do you think the end feast is going to be like?” Hermione gave him a thankful smile.", where it sounded like Hermione talking instead of Harry. The rest was really good though. :)
Author's Response: Maybe it was a bit of filler, but I needed to get her friends in there.
[Report This]Date: 01/29/2006 02:01 am Title: Proles Ater
'Twas short, but sweet. I liked the letter at the end. There were a few sentences where I was stumbling over the words, trying to figure out what they meant (like: "I wanted to let go but somehow I wasn’t able to, well I didn’t want to either to be honest, and then the words started to form themselves." I just couldn't make sense of it for the longest time...). Other than that, I liked it. Good job following up that bombshell of a letter. I'm assuming this will be sort of like a scavenger hunt?
Author's Response: Not exactly a scavenger hunt, more the proces of how something, or someone can change you completely.
[Report This]Date: 01/29/2006 01:55 am Title: The Letter
Well, that was a bombshell, wasn't it? Of course, you kept the father's identity hidden (well done!) The letter is beautifully crafted to make us keep guessing as to who he is, what Draco will do... And I think that you didn't go overboard on the whole 'mom' thing (which would have been easy to do, seeing as how you've never been a mother). I really liked this chapter! :)
Author's Response: I'm glad you think I kept it well hidden, I didn't want to leave any big hints. And I couldn't go over the top with the 'mom' thing, there never really was one.
[Report This]Date: 01/29/2006 01:38 am Title: Conversing
I like how there aren't any references to Hermione being Head Girl/Draco being Head Boy. (Not to say I wouldn't welcome some later on, but it's nice not to have that in the beginning of the story).
Author's Response: Even if they were Head Boy and Head Girl, it wouldn't matter. This is just after NEWT's and it seemed totally irrelevant.
[Report This]Date: 01/28/2006 07:15 pm Title: A Beginning In Understanding
Ooh. I like how you told the same thing from two different points of view, and how they were both woven together in such a way to be almost seamless. Très bien! I'm intruiged to know what was in that letter, and what Draco's apparent "predicament" is. I'll make sure to read the rest of your chapters to satisfy my curiosity!
Author's Response: The change is bigger for Draco, than Hermione, but I need them both for this... That's why this chapter is about her.
[Report This]Date: 01/28/2006 07:11 pm Title: Death In The Family
I think the beginning was a little slow, but it is a very interesting beginning. Methinks that there were a lot of references to this "secret" without actually saying what it is, leaving me to wonder if I just missed it somehow or if it will only be revealed in a later chapter. I do like it though, so good job on the first chapter!
Author's Response: You need something to lure the reader in, this was the only beginning I could think of.
[Report This]Date: 01/23/2006 10:05 pm Title: Ile Saint-Louis
wow!! love the story cant wait for the next chapter!!! hopefully soon?
great sory!!!!!
*LB *
Author's Response: I will submit it tomorrow, it's time for bed first.
[Report This]Date: 01/15/2006 06:25 am Title: Ile Saint-Louis
keep up the good work, can't wait for the next bit.
Author's Response: Thanks!
[Report This]Date: 01/12/2006 06:56 pm Title: Ile Saint-Louis
I hope you kee going with this. Your Draco is a very interesting character....
Author's Response: A cruel kid pushed into something he doesn't want, yeah you might call that interesting. I'm currently a bit stuck though, even if it is in chapter 12.
[Report This]Date: 01/07/2006 10:46 pm Title: Ile Saint-Louis
I can't wait to read the rest! Send me a message when your done. OH yeah, almost forgot have a ten!
Author's Response: When I'm done, or with the next chapter. I'm not even sure where the ending is going yet, though I have an idea.
[Report This]Date: 01/04/2006 02:00 am Title: Ile Saint-Louis
ouuuu suspenseful! haha hmm i dont really know what im expecting.. but i cant wait to find out who the father is, nwo that'll be intense! :D
ps. just wondering.. is there any.. romance per se thats gunna happen between draco and hermione?
Author's Response: Well, there will be. I'm getting closer to it in my writing (chapter 11 is finished) but the story is not just about those two, so it will not be on the forefront.
[Report This]Date: 12/31/2005 10:33 pm Title: Ile Saint-Louis
So wait, if this is Nalya, where is Lydia? I wonder if there is a mistake.
Author's Response: I'm sorry if it wasn't clear, Nalya and Lydia are one and the same. It was hearing her real name that made Nalya realise Narcissa was gone. It was another form of protection.
[Report This]Date: 12/29/2005 08:20 pm Title: Ile Saint-Louis
Evil, evil, evil cliffhangers....
Very interesting story. Update soon, please.
Author's Response: Thanks, I will.
[Report This]Date: 12/29/2005 05:57 pm Title: Ile Saint-Louis
graahhh! that cliff-hanger was evil indeed. but it certainly makes me anxious for the next installment. great work!
Author's Response: Sorry, I love cliffhangers, I can't help myself.
[Report This]Date: 12/27/2005 02:47 pm Title: Proles Ater
hmmm, proles ater...dark offspring. Interesting, makes me wonder what the sister is like. Looking forward to the next installments (and it's nice to see a nice Draco for a change)!
Author's Response: Draco is not nice, don't get me wrong, but he was very willing to follow his father. He's just forced to change his direction, and unexpectedly starts to like it a bit.
[Report This]Date: 12/25/2005 12:41 pm Title: Proles Ater
(I'll try this again.) Wonderful story. Draco's struggle with his decision and limited time to make it has forced his hand. I like that because it has made him start on a path that will probably change his life in the best way possible. I can actually buy into the premise as a scenarioi that can reform Draco. Excited to hear more.
Author's Response: I never really felt for the stories where all of a sudden he is nice. We can notice him becoming nice, but with his upbringing, there needs to be something to start the change.
[Report This]Date: 12/15/2005 09:19 pm Title: The Letter
Oh, more, more, more, more, more, please!!! I am intrigued with where this is going!
Author's Response: Soon, hopefully.
[Report This]Date: 11/23/2005 08:47 pm Title: The Letter
I like how you are doing this. I just found it yesterday. Can't wait to see what Draco chooses.
Author's Response: I don't have the relationships with my parents that Draco has with his, though I do prefer one over the other. As cruel as that sounds, I know. But just imagine, you'll know his choice, it is the only one you can make.
[Report This]Date: 11/23/2005 10:25 am Title: The Letter
wowwow. great job w/ the letter (and the previous chapter, too.) i can definitely see that happening to narcissa. cant wait to see draco's reaction..
Author's Response: And the other little secrets he will learn...
[Report This]Date: 11/22/2005 06:06 pm Title: The Letter
Congradulations on your new family member!
The story is progressing beautifully, as for finding help in the strangest of places, one has to wonder if the letter was dropped by Draco and Hermione found it, or if it jumped. How Slytherin for such a letter to find it's way into someone's hands such as a muggle born like Hermione.
Dianara
Author's Response: I'm actually not sure how that letter got away from Draco, myself. I only know that it did. As for help, well, lets just wait until the next chapter. You'll know more about helping out then.
[Report This]Date: 11/15/2005 10:11 am Title: Conversing
I'm enjoying your mysterious introduction to the story. The letter is a wonderful maguffin. I hope that you'll continue in this Hitchcockian manner and keep the contents of the letter concealed, it's so great to see the reactions of the information from those who read it. It's like a stone dropping into the lake, long after the stone has dropped from sight, the ripples are still visible on the surface.
Author's Response: The letter is coming out, but I have other bombs I can still drop, don't worry.
[Report This]Date: 11/10/2005 10:32 pm Title: A Beginning In Understanding
Excellent start. I am looking forward to reading more. Just what was in that letter??
Author's Response: Thanks. You'll find out what is in that letter, but not yet. It will be one of the future chapters. There are clues though.
[Report This]Date: 11/09/2005 10:45 pm Title: A Beginning In Understanding
Nice followup to the intriguing beginning. I'm definitely looking forward to reading more of this story.
Author's Response: Thanks. I'm looking forward to writing more of it. I'm currently working on chapter 11 and I'm stuck. Fortunately, I'm only submitting chapter 3 at the moment.
[Report This]Date: 11/09/2005 10:23 am Title: A Beginning In Understanding
i can't wait to see where this goes. great job on this chapter-your Hermione is terrific. but, come on, what's in the letter???? :)
Author's Response: Sorry, the letter will not be revealed just yet. When I first started writing I thought it would be the second chapter, but something came up. The letter will be chapter...
[Report This]Date: 11/09/2005 02:41 am Title: A Beginning In Understanding
This is an interesting start. I'm looking forward to reading more and finding out what the letter entails.
Author's Response: Thanks. You'll find out soon.