[Report This]Date: 02/04/2006 12:12 am Title: Six
"...and the slight stubble on his face..." Would Lucius really have stubble on his face? Poor Gwen. I knew Lucius was a mean guy, but that's just evil. Ah, but I guess it had to happen, eh? Good job with this chapter :)
[Report This]Date: 02/04/2006 12:06 am Title: Five
Finally (finally!) Gwen is standing up to Lucius. I must say that I'm fairly happy that it happened. Tres bien. I think that this chapter, even though it has less smut and more plot, is one of you better ones. There were a few grammatical mistakes, just places where sentences could have been divided into two, but other than that it was good. (ex. “Forget it Lucius, don’t bother coming back we are done!” could have been “Forget it Lucius, don’t bother coming back! We are done!” or even “Forget it Lucius! Don’t bother coming back, we are done!”) Just to point that out. ;)
[Report This]Date: 02/03/2006 11:58 pm Title: Four
Do I have much to say about this chapter? Not really. But I did happen to like it. *thumbs up* :)
[Report This]Date: 02/03/2006 11:55 pm Title: Three
Not bad, not bad. I like the way Lucius was never satisfied (until now, that is), and I had half a brain to think that when he said "Do what you did last time. Exactly," that if she didn't do it *exactly* he would come again and make her do it until she got it exactly how it was the first time. *sigh* But I'm nearly never right, am I?
[Report This]Date: 02/03/2006 11:50 pm Title: Two
Aww. Tee hee. That wasn't bad. I think that the changes between setting are a little confusing, as if she's at the Quiddich game, then she's a work and then *poof* suddenly she's at home. That's my only concern. The rest was done well though.
[Report This]Date: 02/03/2006 11:43 pm Title: One
Despite the fact that it's very unlikely that Narcissa Malfoy would have babysat anybody when she was younger, I liked it. I think that you've woven this "Gwen" character into the story very nicely. :)
[Report This]Date: 09/23/2005 01:03 am Title: Conclusion
Oh wow. Very passionate, intruiging, in-depth story. Sad ending though. But very well written.
[Report This]Date: 04/17/2005 12:34 pm Title: Conclusion
A very enthralling fic that captured raw emotion, it was a wonderful read, thank you for sharing it with me and everyone else. *~Luv Loz, mwa!~*
[Report This]Date: 04/01/2005 03:58 am Title: Twelve
I just read both of you stories and i loved both of them. You sure do love to kill Lucius off at the end lol. Your a very talented writer and i look forward to more of your stories.
[Report This]Date: 08/17/2004 02:56 am Title: Conclusion
Brava! I quite enjoyed your story! Luciucs is my precioussss. Yesss. He issss. Him dying was ::sniffs:: very chick flicky but it touched me all the same! ::sobs:: But that could also be the fact that I'm lulu over Lucius that is influencing that. Lol. Good fic.
[Report This]Date: 08/09/2004 04:09 pm Title: Conclusion
The whole Lucius with a younger girl thing was odd, and it could have been better written...but oh well. On a scale of 1-10? I would give it a 4.
[Report This]Date: 08/04/2004 12:08 am Title: Conclusion
One word. Marvelous. Well written! ^^; Keep up the good work.. I'll look for more of your stories, most definately!
[Report This]Date: 07/31/2004 04:46 am Title: Conclusion
Excellent story. Well written and full of Lucius as we know he is, cold, arrogant and self-serving. Loved the ending, even in his arrogance he didn't believe his mortality. Lovely smut as well. I love Lucius how you've written him. The Machiavelli of the wizarding world
[Report This]Date: 07/28/2004 10:09 am Title: Conclusion
Damn that Lucius, he'd never do anything for his own good, has to know it all! He deserved it anyway! This is the first fic I've read that really mad me feel sorry for Draco! At least she'd straightened it all out in the end. I like to think that she'd give Draco at least one of his own later on. Will Lucius out of the way, I'd like to think she will.
[Report This]Date: 07/25/2004 07:11 am Title: One
Arrgh! What an insufferable b*stard that wizard is! He could at least be a little grateful for her devotion to him! But, your heroine is right... he's irresistible :) I enjoy this story a lot! Thanks for writing!
[Report This]Date: 07/23/2004 12:14 am Title: Nine
OK, forget that this goes completely against Canon, I don't think Narcissa would be so congenial, but we don't really hear too much about her. I hope you continue this because your plot logic is quite good and I want to see if anything "better" develops with Draco. Please post soon.