[Report This]Date: 09/12/2004 06:03 am Title: Chapter 3 - Threats, Taunts, and Jests
Ah poor love, I would have given up and gone home. But good for her that she stuck with it.
Author's Response: So would have I.
[Report This]Date: 09/12/2004 05:53 am Title: Chapter 2 - An Invitation
Yeah, still hooked, I can't wait to see her in Potions with Snape
Author's Response: Thank goodness it was relatively easy to find an excuse for her to attend his classes.
[Report This]Date: 09/12/2004 05:44 am Title: Chapter 1 - Young Harry Potter on the Block
Great first chapter - I'm hooked
Author's Response: Thanks! You know, this was my first fic, and I kind of have a soft spot for it.
[Report This]Date: 07/31/2004 03:52 am Title: Chapter 23 - Epilogue
OMG! I am sitting here at work looking like a fool, bawling like a baby....
Loved it, write more.
Author's Response: That's wonderful! ... I mean, not the "looking like a fool at work", but the fat you liked it so much. Go to Occlumancy and you'll see a new fic that I'm posting right now. It isn't finished yet, though.
[Report This]Date: 07/10/2004 11:37 pm Title: Chapter 23 - Epilogue
Your story was very moving--you conveyed strong emotions in your characters and did so in a realistic, believeable fashion. I particularly liked your perceptions of Snape and his relationships with others, and the original character is very well-drawn. An intelligent, well-written story.
Author's Response: Thank you so much. It give me great courage when I read your words.
[Report This]Date: 07/06/2004 08:07 pm Title: Chapter 1 - Young Harry Potter on the Block
Kudos to you for making up such a believable character! Good job with Snape, too. Unlike many fan fics, the personality you gave him flowed well with what we already know about his character. The story was beautiful!
Author's Response: You're a wonderful reader and I appreciate your words beyond what you can imagine.
[Report This]Date: 07/06/2004 08:06 pm Title: Chapter 1 - Young Harry Potter on the Block
Kudos to you for making up such a believable character! Good job with Snape, too. Unlike many fan fics, the personality you gave him flowed well with what we already know about his character. The story was beautiful!
[Report This]Date: 05/08/2004 12:03 pm Title: Chapter 23 - Epilogue
::sniffs:: that was the most beutiful story I've ever read ::grabs another tissuse:: lovey, truly lovely :)
Author's Response: Thanks! YOu just made my day!
[Report This]Date: 05/04/2004 04:23 pm Title: Chapter 23 - Epilogue
Why does it have to be over? I trully enjoyed it! So happyt hat it was finished and that I was able to find this site through the other one you write on. Your writing is fantastic, easy to read, and a wonderful plot. I loved it to the very end. Now I am sad so you need to write MORE PLEASE! You are still the best writer of fanfic that I have ever had the privlage of reading! THANK YOU!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! You can't imagine how your generous words affect me.
[Report This]Date: 04/22/2004 05:47 am Title: Chapter 23 - Epilogue
*sniffles and wipes eyes happily* That was a lovely story. Very much a ten.
Author's Response: Thank you, I'm so pleased. That kind of response really affects me.
[Report This]Date: 04/10/2004 09:17 pm Title: Chapter 23 - Epilogue
loved the story. thanks so much for your efforts! fics like this feed my fanfic habit!!
Author's Response: You just made my day...
[Report This]Date: 04/10/2004 05:15 am Title: Chapter 23 - Epilogue
I'm not sure if I like the way you glossed over the rest of their lives on the epilouge, but I know that the story itself made up for it. It was so nice to see a character that started as a mugle, remain a muggle through out it all. Very well done, and I hope to see more stories from you in the future.
Author's Response: Thank you for your words of support. I guess the reason I was so brief in the epilogue is that this story was about how they met and got together. However, I guess your point is that I might have just skipped the epilogue altogether for better effect. Hmmmm.... Must keep that in mind next time.
[Report This]Date: 04/05/2004 08:42 am Title: Chapter 1 - Young Harry Potter on the Block
A most interesting start. Am wondering how much fun this little romp is going to task our poor Potions Master...
[Report This]Date: 04/01/2004 06:38 am Title: Chapter 10 - Research Into Remedies
Okay, so this time I was prepared. It was nice to read. And it is nice to know that at least Dumbledore seems to be backing her.
[Report This]Date: 04/01/2004 06:33 am Title: Chapter 9 - The Strain of Composure
... and just when I thought I would have to point out that Snape was quite OOC ... wow, you really had me on here!
[Report This]Date: 04/01/2004 06:27 am Title: Chapter 8 - The Fair
Poor, poor girl. I hope the culprits will at least be punshed this time. As the trip has to be cut short, there is no way of ignoring their actions, is it?
[Report This]Date: 04/01/2004 06:21 am Title: Chapter 7 - School Starts
Poor Severus - having to chaperone students on an excursion.
[Report This]Date: 03/29/2004 09:45 am Title: Chapter 6 - Summer with the Order
*smiles*
Remus polyjuiced as a female - now, that would be a sight to behold. Does he have to wear high heels as well?
Author's Response: I was tempted, but decided against it, since it would remove the haze of ambiguity that surrounds her.
[Report This]Date: 03/29/2004 09:32 am Title: Chapter 5 - Magic Cancellation
Uh-oh! It is apparently possible to "shield" against magic? Now, THAT should enable Dumbledore to explore amazingh new possibilities in the fight against Voldy.
Author's Response: Thank you.
[Report This]Date: 03/29/2004 09:24 am Title: Chapter 4 - The Tower
Well done. Nice interaction. "Thinking along those lines" I am off to the next chapter now!
[Report This]Date: 03/29/2004 09:14 am Title: Chapter 3 - Threats, Taunts, and Jests
Another nice chapter. Snapes behaviour was very believable; I would have expected more understanding and concern from Mme Pomfrey, as those "jokes" were quite dangerous, but as we never saw her attitude towards Muggles in canon, it is still possibly "in character" for her.
[Report This]Date: 03/28/2004 12:14 pm Title: Chapter 2 - An Invitation
Hmmmm ... this leaves a few questions:
What exactly was her field of study at university? "Science" in general is not enough of an explanation.
Then there is the problem of using electronic devices at Hogwarts. The books tell us it is impossible, so making it work nonetheless would need a little more of an explanation.
Her (does she have a name, by the way?) conclusion that Potions should be the first thing to try is logical - the question whether the magic of the one creating the potion is actually needed or if it is the ingredients and way of preparing the potion alone that gives it its potential is one I have asked myself before and would like to see your opinion about! And what a nice way to have her interact more with Snape. ;)
There still remain some questions: Why is she given such "shabby" quarters - and how is Filch as a Squib able to light torches magically or help her getting rid of Grindelows and other such things?
Last point for this chapter: There are a few spelling mistakes and missing commas, so you might want to have someone look over your chapters before postinmg. Sometime, a second set of eyes sees those nasty little errors one misses when proofreading one's own text.
All in all, I enjoyed reading this chapter very much and hope you are not angry at me for pointing out the things that didn't quite work for me.
Looking forward to her first Potions class now!
Author's Response: To my dear reviewer, Lucie: Thank you for helping me improve the story. I've made several corrections that reflect your observations. I've made some modifications about the electronic devices. I hope you think they are enough. About the shabby quarters, I hope this will become clear in a few chapters. I changed a word to suggest that Filch does not create the torch-salt-shaker and only provides her with it. I found two spelling mistakes which I corrected (I can't believe they got by the spell checker!)
Two things I left unchanged: I assume Filch has been provided with the proper tools for magical pest control (see 'Prisoner of Azkaban' where Lupin asks Filch not to get rid of a boggart). About her name and her field of study, I hope as the story progresses you'll see the reason I chose to leave those unspecified.
[Report This]Date: 03/28/2004 11:52 am Title: Chapter 1 - Young Harry Potter on the Block
Wow! What a way to introduce a new character and to start a story! I'm off now to read the next chapters ...