Wow, it took my breath away... Its great the way it is. The style, the length. Normally I prefer long stories over one shots, but if it would have been a long story it would have spoiled the "thing" from this story. How I feel when I read it, the darkness, the... "thing"... Sorry I cant be more specific. Keep up the good work!
that was the best one I've read so far. Wow. How old are you? I can't write like that. I'm crying right now. Not very happy. Maybe you should some happy things too. It's just so SSAAAAAAAAAAAAD but in a good way. But not really. But IT was good...I lOVED IT!