its a great intro to a story! but it does need work. if u need help i can help. ive been writing for a while.
This was adorable! I can see this happening, given the context. And who knows, Dumbledore's the sort to introduce odd customs.
WHAT?! I thought it was a great story!
Things wrong in the story: To short- good stories are at least a chapter Corny- This made me feel like barfing Things Good: pairing- This was really good pairing Advice: Try better next time