Short and sweet with a little sexy thrown in. Nice job.
If you want it to be a story then make it a story, not just a few sentences. Its a good start for something in this category but you need more.
good detail for something so short but maybe you could make it longer?
I thought it was rather well written, Great job. make some more :).
Nice. :) I like this, short but sweet. I love Hermione/Krum.