sabinatarium 2007.07.20 - 05:35PM
I LOVE it! You managed to make an X-rated scene so special, so emotional, with such perfect background and feelings- just the way it would be! A lot of fics with the same stuff as you have in it are PWP, also without any FEELINGS whatsoever- but you managed to convey sweet teenage sex, with all the wonderful, cute feelings and the pure love that come with it. Not only that, but the buildup was amazing too- I loved the way you wrote Ron throughout! It is a true coming-of-age fic- first being treated as an adult by his dad, then feeling responsibility for the world, and then the crossing of the threshold with Hermione. Wonderful-- I can't praise this enough!
HumanTales 2007.07.20 - 10:47PM
I like the way you have Ron and Hermione clearly still with Harry, in spirit if not physically. And their "spontaneous moment" feels as if JKR could have written it (if she weren't keeping sex, beyond kissing and implications, firmly out of the books.) Of course, I've been a big Ron/Hermione shipper since Goblet of Fire. Nicely done.
hprbdfan1 2007.07.22 - 09:27AM
i really liked it everything especially how ron n hermione r with harry till the end no matter wat( totally jk rowling) n adding the teenage sex has really romantic!!! i love ron n hermione:)
JustCallMeShaniqua 2007.08.13 - 06:25PM
I didn't expect this when I started reading, but I am pleasantly surprised. This is well-written and very sweet. Nice job!