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Reviewer: MithLuin Anonymous star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 05/19/2007 09:46 am Title: The Things We Do For Love

You packed a lot into such a short story! Very well done, with Bellatrix the manipulative go-between and Lucius 'falling' in the end. Poor Narcissa. Oh, btw, I think the rating should be a bit higher, because of the language you use. Perhaps "B"

Reviewer: kazfeist Anonymous star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 04/21/2007 01:48 am Title: The Things We Do For Love

Buzzy, is this a departure for you from your usual mode of transport? Just wondering... But, it's a very creative and unique approach to why Lucius would have joined the Death Eaters. I don't think I've ever seen it before. You usually have a different spin on things, though. :D

Reviewer: LariLee Anonymous star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 04/01/2007 01:57 am Title: The Things We Do For Love

01-25-2007 09:25 Rated 10

Lovely! Trust Bella to get what she wants, which is, of course, what Tom wants. Truly Slytherin!

Author's Response: I just love a manipulative Bella! I'm so glad you enjoyed it.

Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 04/01/2007 01:56 am Title: The Things We Do For Love

01-24-2007 18:31

Oy! What an introduction. Blame in on Lorett - it's all her fault.

I'm happy to have inspired you to reach beyond your comfort zone in regard to creative writing, my darling. Although my little kids have not strayed to the bedroom in any of their teenaged make-out sessions, that's a line I don't like to cross either. But for now, as far as kissing goes, which for a bunch of single kids I don't see as being unfaithful, since most of them have crushes but no one is actually *dating* anyone, I think it's just teens being teens. In LOVE one moment and then confused the next. Just trying to figure it all out. Not to say you can't fall in love and stay in love being so young, but it's rare.

But, back to you. I like how you spun the lure of temptation and adultery into a many faceted sin.

I don't know if you're a gardener, but if you are, you can relate to this: I liken Lucius' infidelity to a sucker root that shoots off the main trunk of a plant. It grows and feeds off of the lifeblood of your main plant. It looks like it's nothing, harmless. But, if you don't take care of that sucker it will eventually take over. It will change it and warp that plant into something different. Like Lucius and his marriage and the love of a woman who was willing to be faithful to him.

He was tempted.

And his temptation lured him into this darkness that spread into every corner of his life and warped it. It was never the same. Nice touch too that Bella was the one leading him astray.

Looking forward to more challenges from you!

Lorett

Author's Response: I love the sucker image. I was picturing a cancer - just one little cell to start with, but then it grows and poisons and... I'm still working this theme, but I keep teasing around the edges; I'm going to have to dig a lot deeper to get to the meat of how it works and what disturbs me so much about. You have indeed taken me out of my comfort zone, which is exactly where growth happens, so I thank you for it.

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Date: 09/27/2008 10:08 pm Title: The Things We Do For Love

MithLuin 2007.05.19 - 09:46AM 1: The Things We Do For Love Signed [Delete]
You packed a lot into such a short story! Very well done, with Bellatrix the manipulative go-between and Lucius 'falling' in the end. Poor Narcissa. Oh, btw, I think the rating should be a bit higher, because of the language you use. Perhaps "B"

Reviewer: celisnebula Signed [Report This]
Date: 09/27/2008 10:08 pm Title: The Things We Do For Love

kazfeist 2007.04.21 - 01:48AM 1: The Things We Do For Love Signed [Delete]
Buzzy, is this a departure for you from your usual mode of transport? Just wondering... But, it's a very creative and unique approach to why Lucius would have joined the Death Eaters. I don't think I've ever seen it before. You usually have a different spin on things, though. :D

Reviewer: celisnebula Signed [Report This]
Date: 09/27/2008 10:08 pm Title: The Things We Do For Love

LariLee 2007.04.01 - 01:57AM 1: The Things We Do For Love Anonymous [Delete]
01-25-2007 09:25 Rated 10

Lovely! Trust Bella to get what she wants, which is, of course, what Tom wants. Truly Slytherin!

Author's Response: I just love a manipulative Bella! I'm so glad you enjoyed it.

Reviewer: celisnebula Signed [Report This]
Date: 09/27/2008 10:08 pm Title: The Things We Do For Love

01-24-2007 18:31

Oy! What an introduction. Blame in on Lorett - it's all her fault.

I'm happy to have inspired you to reach beyond your comfort zone in regard to creative writing, my darling. Although my little kids have not strayed to the bedroom in any of their teenaged make-out sessions, that's a line I don't like to cross either. But for now, as far as kissing goes, which for a bunch of single kids I don't see as being unfaithful, since most of them have crushes but no one is actually *dating* anyone, I think it's just teens being teens. In LOVE one moment and then confused the next. Just trying to figure it all out. Not to say you can't fall in love and stay in love being so young, but it's rare.

But, back to you. I like how you spun the lure of temptation and adultery into a many faceted sin.

I don't know if you're a gardener, but if you are, you can relate to this: I liken Lucius' infidelity to a sucker root that shoots off the main trunk of a plant. It grows and feeds off of the lifeblood of your main plant. It looks like it's nothing, harmless. But, if you don't take care of that sucker it will eventually take over. It will change it and warp that plant into something different. Like Lucius and his marriage and the love of a woman who was willing to be faithful to him.

He was tempted.

And his temptation lured him into this darkness that spread into every corner of his life and warped it. It was never the same. Nice touch too that Bella was the one leading him astray.

Looking forward to more challenges from you!

Lorett

Author's Response: I love the sucker image. I was picturing a cancer - just one little cell to start with, but then it grows and poisons and... I'm still working this theme, but I keep teasing around the edges; I'm going to have to dig a lot deeper to get to the meat of how it works and what disturbs me so much about. You have indeed taken me out of my comfort zone, which is exactly where growth happens, so I thank you for it.

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