You're a really good writer, but I don't like your style at all, I mean I don't realy believe Draco and Pansy to be that cheesy (it almost made me cringe inside) just because they're in love. I think it's very out of character. But I'm not bashing, because I think you're well talented with your writing skills etc. I just... Yeah.
My goodness, this is so sexy! I'm glad I stopped by to give it another read!