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Reviewer: SataiDelenn Signed star star [Report This]
Date: 09/27/2010 01:41 am Title: Chapter 1

Well, for the most part, this was good. You just might want to edit the following:

Use "ungh, or ohhhh, or oooooh", in place of "ugh", since "ugh" is used to represent disgust, not lust.

Also, you should replace "shuttering" with "shuddering" since you're not closing the shutters on a window, but writing about Hermione shuddering in pleasure beneath her lover...

Other than that, it was a good scene.

Reviewer: fly_chickadee Anonymous star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 01/03/2008 11:32 pm Title: Chapter 1

I like how the setting- the thunder/lightning- contributed to the eroticism of the piece. You made this pairing so much better. :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much!

Reviewer: snapcracklepop Anonymous star star half star [Report This]
Date: 10/15/2007 10:13 am Title: Chapter 1

I thought that it was very wrong to have someone as young as Hermione doing that with someone so much older than her in this day in age. the story was ok, but i think that the age difference made that almost seem like rape.

Author's Response: Heh. Thanks for the review. I do appreciate feedback. I'm not going to go into the whole age difference thing. I've read too many forums with people arguing over this. Some people are disgusted by it, some aren't. And, uh, I'm a big fan of RL/HG. :

Reviewer: firefly124 Anonymous star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 09/22/2007 06:20 pm Title: Chapter 1

Excellent! Very hot indeed.

Author's Response: Why thank you, Firefly!

Reviewer: SH_Anonymous_Entry Anonymous star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 08/30/2007 11:33 am Title: Chapter 1

Odd Doll 2007.07.26 - 05:53PM

That was insanely hot.

Author's Response: I am please you enjoyed it. :D

Reviewer: SH_Anonymous_Entry Anonymous star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 08/30/2007 11:33 am Title: Chapter 1

Maddy Riddle 2007.05.31 - 01:30AM

I like it. It was a very good story.

Author's Response: Thank you! Glad you liked it.

Reviewer: SH_Anonymous_Entry Anonymous star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 08/30/2007 11:32 am Title: Chapter 1

Adriana 2007.05.30 - 07:35PM

Wow! Very nice

Author's Response: Thanks.

Reviewer: SH_Anonymous_Entry Anonymous star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 08/30/2007 11:32 am Title: Chapter 1

BloodyBrilliant 2007.05.24 - 07:25PM

Holy cow! Very erotic peice though I would've liked to know more about when and where this was happening. Thanks for the fic.

Author's Response: Thank you! :) Um, yea, I left things wide open, didn't I?

Reviewer: SH_Anonymous_Entry Anonymous star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 08/30/2007 11:32 am Title: Chapter 1

ozarkmoon 2007.05.24 - 11:36AM

OH. Just lovely.

Author's Response: Thank you, thank you.

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