Reviewer: michelline Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 12/08/2005 06:07 pm Title: Letter one

Wow. What a great start. I love the letter writing idea and your letter is just brilliant. Funny, though. I never thought I would see YOU writing a Lucius/Hermione story. Almost seems like you're cheating on our Most Excellent Potions Master... ;) Anyway, I'm truly looking forward to reading more and more and more of this. You are such a fun writer to read.

Reviewer: ZahariaCelestina Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 12/06/2005 12:19 pm Title: Letter one

Hello there! What an original story! I will certainly read your next installment; you have made me very curious, here! :) I like the characterisation of Lucius; there are many very clever comments here and there (and of course, the third paragraph is priceless!). I just hope Lucius will not be too "monochromatic" and a little more complex, as the letters go by. It's too easy to make the bad guys only purely bad (and Malfoys only purely arrogant). One thing that I noticed is the flow in the letter. The structure is excellent, its topic and intention are dead on, but the flow is not quite right. It is a little "point form" still, as if it were the canevas of a letter rather than its final version. I hope it does not discourage you, for it is not my intent; I rather hope it helps! Take care, and happy writing! I'll be there when you post next!