Whoa - powerfully written - nicely done - looking forward to the sequel posted here at Lumos site - glad you mentioned in the sequel that this should be read first - someone mentioned/recommended your sequel story in one of their answers to one of their reviewers, I just had to take a look. Wow - You just drew me into your storyline and I could not stop reading - damn talk about captivating - I felt like I was lost in the long swim with Ethan and Serious - still confused as to what Serious meant by he is/was on duty - doing what?? - most likely will find that out in the sequel. CONGRATULATIONS on a terrific two chapters. Totally impressed.
Well, on that note, off I go to read the sequel now; so, please DO have a great day.
Hmmmm !! lol. 1) Had a contest over here to see if anybody could guess who the participants where - out of 5 nobody figures it out and we all died laughing when we found out. 2) Wondered which one - they said your answer I said the other one. Still died laughing. 3) Again no one guessed correctly as to who it was with the grim - and we had one person that ummm liked it - lol 4) Damn - we are dieing in the dust here for correct answers, and again a different person liked it. 5) OMG REALLY did not see that coming (no pun intended). Decided the boys ermmm, at least deserved applause. Thanks for a good laugh.
Author's Response: Glad you had fun with them! They are a bit... odd.
'It used to be a bear.' - NO ! It has been 3 years since you posted this segment. Please say you did write the next part that you spoke of (somewhere) and just forgot to post it to this site. I need to learn to spell "Sirius"; but regardless it sounds like he found somebody and Ethan sounds like he needs somebody and you are a damn good storyteller - so give already - lol. (Nothing like beating my poor authors over the head with the proverbial wet-noodle). But hey, you have a gem here in these two stories and I just know people are waiting on the sidelines to grasp that elusive *longer* endeavour that you spoke of. (Hint hint). lol. I'm still going to place you on my "Fav Author List" in hopes that you do continue.
Sirius without his constant prankish good humour - so human with such a depth/wealth of emotion; and your Ethan, so real. Damn, I have not enjoyed a story so much in a long time. Fantastic and congratulations.
Hope to hear from you with a continuation but either way; please DO have a great day.
Hi just came over to see what you had written because of the nice reviews you gave to Snegurochka's stories, very insightful. You asked another reviewer here, what had prompted him (Sirius) to try and turn his best friend into a murderer. IMO and I happen to like Sirius but he was a prankster as a kid and did not really see the harm that could befall Remus until 20/20 hind sight set in. I could be wrong but that is how I see it. You have created the other side of the coin in this story regarding Sirius and it is greatly appreciated. I never stopped to see Sirius in this light to be honest and that puts me at fault. Thanks for sharing.
Author's Response: I'm sorry, I thought I had responded to both your reviews! I certainly read and appreciated them. Yes, I tend to think of Sirius as, "Friendly, overeager, not too bright." Kind of a contrast to the oh-so-cool picture we frequently see. Glad you enjoyed.
Tonks needs to get on with the next nights activities - lol. You said - 'I have no ideas for it yet'. Tonks is not my cup of tea normally, but you have hit on an unusual idea. Good for you. Hope you are definitely going for the idea. LJ confuses the braincells out of me, so please posts to Lumos. Giving credit where credit is due. The story was intriguing (so was the slash - lol). It should be interesting to see what Tonks comes up with for ideas pertaining to work, to allow her to maintain her surveillance of Lucius and to afford her an opportunity to overhear his conversations, etc. Thanks for sharing, and have a good day.
I thought it was nicely done, but then I am not a poetry person, but I liked yours. Have a good day.
Author's Response: Thank you! I appreciate your taking time to review :D
damn - that was softly emotional, you could have been anybody - Harry, Severus, Remus, etc. - regardless, very well done. Have a good day, and thanks for sharing.
Author's Response: That's one reason why I left the narrator anonymous ... and thanks for taking the time to review.
I have added you to my "Fav Authors" area - hoping you will consider posting the 4th Chapter "Goodwill" - see that you have not posted it in the last year but a reader/reviewer can always hope - lol. Also sent a private ?? message to your name acct.
Anyways, please do have a great day.
Oh Come ON Readers - this was Published: 09/02/2009 - Last Updated: 12/10/2009; that is Sept to Dec of 2009 - 3 months posted and it already has roughly 369 Hits/readers and only 2 reviews - PLLLEEEEAAASSSEEEEE.
Obviously the author put a lot of work into this endeavour; this was a really well thought out project of an 11 chapter story = that takes effort on the authors part people/readers.
I don't do very well with reviews myself; but even a simple thank you, I am sure would be appreciated by the author. Even better an "I enjoyed that because ..." or an "I don't like the story because ...".
We the readers/reviewers don't have to go overboard but SOME feed back is useful for the authors.
Either we encourage them or we will not have any stories available to read. (Hint, hint).
Personally I would rather read something successfully done and completed; as is this story.
Sorry for the rant, "shadowycat".
I enjoyed your storyline and felt it was unique. You actually made me nervous when you had Snape in the cave; oh boy. Good going and congratulations on getting an emotional response from me (not easy to accomplish with me).
I enjoy when you authors come up with your own characters that supplement the original characters and where you the author decide to place the original characters.
These are fun things to read. (Plus I prefer the slash elements. LOL.) I gave you a "9" on the rating scale mostly due to the fact that I just personally feel that nothing IS perfect. So do not get discouraged by the rating (it is very hard to get a rating of "10" from me. Think I have possibly given a "10" to only 2 stories in my number of years of reading fanfiction on ANY site.
I just want to thank you for sharing and to wish that you DO have a great day. Bye for now.
Author's Response: You're right, everyone needs a bit of encouragement, and feedback is very useful to an author. Hit counts tell you that people look, but they don't give any indication whether they liked what they saw or not...and it's both helpful and nice to know what your readers think. Thank you so much for offering your support and opinions. I'm very glad to know that you enjoyed the story! :D
LOL. "astopperindeath" - you stated: This story was inspired by a prompt by ApollinaV: “Sirius didn’t die. The curtained portal propelled him forward in time. He reappears at a very inopportune moment of your choice. Bonus points for extra awkwardness.” = I hope you won something cause I thought this was excellent. LOL. Then you stated: Also, this is my first attempt at slash. - well, damn - you did as well as any veteran author; so I hope you got two prizes. LOL.
Actually, to be truthful, you have the makings of an excellent opening chapter to a storyline here if you choose to consider it. I can see you having a lot of fun driving those 3 characters absolutely nuts. I am adding you to my "Fav Authors List" just in case you decide to go for the story. I can see a lot of people really enjoying your unique endeavour. As for the slash - hey do the best that you can and don't sweat the small stuff, just have fun.
Thanks for sharing and please DO have a great day.